Narrative Writing test

Begin Writing Here: 

One day five best friends went to go have a swim at a local beach. The five best friend’s names were Mike,Max,Leo,Tom and Zane They have been best friends since they all were in kindy cartin. So Mike and Max went to go and play were the rocks are Leo,Tom and Zane went to go have a swim just when Mike was walking there was three big black rocks sitting next to the mountain Mike thought it was funny to run across the rocks and think he wouldn't fall just he took another step he had slipped and cut his leg on a old looking eaten shell that was stuck up against one of the black rocks. When Mike had got back up Max was laughing and saying I told you not to run across those rocks he said and Mike was laughing too so they went to Leo,Tom and Zane to see what they were up to. They were swimming out far where if you were standing on the sand you wouldn’t see them.

Max and Mike ran into the water and went out far to see Leo and the others. Leo and Tom were playing splashing all around and Zane was swimming all the way down to the bottom to pick up rocks and sand to throw it at the others well Zane was swimming down to grab a rock he could see something huge in the back round swimming around trying to find something to eat Zane had fired up from under the water and yelled there is a shark under us and all five of them were freaking out trying to see where the shark was.

The shark was swimming around and around them but they couldn’t see it so Zane went under the water to see if it’s still swimming and there it was swimming up towards them slowly Zane shot out of the water as fast as he could and yelled to the rest to swim as fast as you could towards the plate form over there they all swam and swam as fast as they could to the platform that looked  14 to 15 meters far from were they were. Max was wondering if he and his friends were swimming how could the shark know where we were and that Max was thinking so hard when they got there he blamed everything on Mike because he didn’t listen to not run across the rocks because he might fall and cut himself.

When Max and Mike were yelling at each other the shark was surrounding them well Max and Mike were arguing. Tom yelled as loud as he could to tell them to stop yelling or arguing with each other we might die if we do not stick with each other he said .Max and Mike stopped arguing and Max said sorry for blaming everything on you then Mike said it’s alright if i didn’t run on those rocks and not had got a cut we wouldn’t be here so they all came up with a plan to try yell out for help or to try lead the shark somewhere else’ Tom had a idea to use there things they had on to take it off and throw it as far as they could because the shark doesn’t like physical move mint so all the others were saying no way i only have shorts and underwear on but tom was the only one that a t-shirt on so he took it off rapped it into a ball so it will be easier to throw it far once he was finish he threw as far as he could so there was enough time to yell an catch one of the life guards eyes to tell them they need help.

Leo was yelling and screaming and well they were doing that Zane sat in the middle of the platform and started crying because he thought they would die Max turned around and told Zane that everything was going to be alright we will survive this and get out of here so Zane stood up and said i hope so. Just when they were about to yell out the guard saw Mike waving screaming loud as he could to get the life guards attention one of the life guards saw Mike out in the distance waving his arm and screaming the lifeguard turned on his siren and told everyone to get out so he could go and save them. Everyone was hoping out the water somewhere running and screaming at the same time there was even a man sitting there on the ground and crying but he wasn’t even in the water. 

When the lifeguard took his jet ski to and his mate took a nice big white boat. Leo slipped off the platform and fell into the water and the shark turned around and started charging at Leo the lifeguard were so fast that they Saved in time before the shark could even touch him. So they all went into the boat and were relieved that they were saved and not eaten by a shark. And they never stood foot on that beach again.